Sunday 12 September 2010

Size didn’t matter (by Heather)

Write a story titled, “Size Didn’t Matter”

His house stood silhouetted against the severe blue of the late morning sky, its cupolas, chimneys, gables and slate roof lines making stark contrast with the cloudless sky. Andrew leaned against his walking stick and stopped to catch his breath. He waited for the faint whiff of pride he always felt when he looked at the old mansion. Luxury kitchen, ballroom, ten bedrooms, twelve bathrooms – the crowd this house couldn’t take wasn’t worth calling a crowd.

But the whiff of pride didn’t arrive. It was drowned out by the thought that the last time this house had seen a crowd was almost out of his memory. There was him and there was Barbara, his housekeeper. There weren’t any crowds.

He definitely felt flat. The chemo was taking it out of him, no doubt about it. And he shouldn’t be this out of puff after the short walk up from the stables. He’d known the walk would be a bit of a challenge, but he’d wanted to see Sidney. At 18 hands, Sidney was the biggest and finest piece of horseflesh in all of WA. Too bad he’d been a bit sullen in the stable this morning. Probably just reflecting Andrew’s own mood.

He stumped his way up the marble steps, pausing half way up to lean against the balustrade. Hell, he wasn’t going to make it to the top of the steps on this lungful, so he might as well sit down for awhile. He dropped on to one of the steps, positioning his walking stick where he could lean his chin against it.

Thoughts swarmed in. He was 72 years old; he had a death sentence; he had no crowds. Truth be told, he had no individuals.

He thumped the walking stick on the marble. Just because he’d been told the cancer was still moving fast didn’t mean he was about to indulge in any maudlin reflections. There would be no melodramatic surrender to the ebbing life forces and all that crap.

So he didn’t have a crowd of people. He had nothing to be ashamed of. Around him lay a good deal of the evidence of his life. There was the majestic house at his back, the sprawling stables and corrals, the immense shed beside which his 45’ SeaWatch catamaran was currently aground, big enough for a good-sized family to holiday in luxury. It had been brought in this morning from the harbour, to spend a little time in drydock while Andrew had it cleaned and worked out what to do with it.

He rubbed the end of the walking stick against the stubble on his chin. He turned his gaze inward, looking at how he felt. All he could find was tired, tired, tired.

And scared.

And alone.

He sucked in a deep breath. I could die right here, he thought, and nobody would notice until Barbara came to take out supper to the stablehands. Further, nobody would care. The boys and good old Melanie would head straight for their lawyers. Yes, the lawyers and the accountants would have a field day and otherwise there’d be scarcely a ripple in the universe.

To hell with that. That counted as maudlin reflection and he wasn’t having a bar of it.

That’s when he noticed a car pulling up the long driveway. Ah, William’s black BMW. Not driven by William, though. By his chauffeur, what was his name anyway? – Mike, yes that was it. What was Mike doing here? Then his heart leapt a little as he saw the tiny blonde head in the rear seat. The chauffeur jumped out and whipped open the back door, fiddling with the devices on the child’s car seat.

Released, the tiny figure bounded out of the car and began racing toward the house. He stopped in his tracks when he saw the old man on the steps. “Grandpa!” he shouted. “GRANDPA! I comed to see you.” He tripped over the first step, then flew up the remainder until he catapulted himself into Andrew’s arms. “I can stay for THIS many days, Grandpa,” he said, holding up a hand with all fingers thrust out.

Andrew hugged him tightly, for a moment unable to speak. He rose unsteadily to his feet as the chauffeur approached the steps, a little suitcase in one hand and a large empty cardboard box carried by its flap in the other.

“Hello, Mr Branford; you remember me, Mike Bensall. William asked me to drive Ben over – he thought it would be a nice surprise; he can stay for a few days if he’s welcome.”

Andrew ran his fingers through his grandson’s hair as the little face pulled back to beam up at him. “Thank you, Mike. He’s very welcome. He’s very welcome indeed,” he said. “Would you care to stay for a drink?”

Mike shook his head. “I’ve got to get the car back.” He dropped the suitcase at the foot of the stairs, then waved the cardboard box. “Pardon me, sir, but Ben insisted on bringing his cardboard box along.”

Ben released his grip on Andrew and barrelled back down the stairs. “It’s my boat, Grandpa. It’s my BOAT. Watch!” He clambered inside the box and began rocking from side to side. “Watch out for the big waves, Grandpa!” The chauffeur returned to the car and waved goodbye.

Andrew gazed at his grandson ruefully. He could not help but glance at the other boat on the property: the SeaWatch, elegantly perched on its double hulls, the gleaming brass of its railings visible from here.

He had collected around himself the finest of everything – and his grandson chose the cardboard box.

He had anything a body could want, and no one to share his life with.

– Except this miracle, this little grandson with the shining eyes.

“Come fishin’ with me, Grandpa,” the boy shouted, sliding to one side in the big box.

Andrew walked down the steps, to play with his grandson.

4 comments:

Scriveners said...

Heather

What a great story. I was captivated and it was such a fluent read. I was struck by construction of the ebbing life and the youthful exuberance (big and small) juxtaposed with a cardboard box boat alongside the real thing with shiny brass (big and small) and then the big house with no crowd to use it. I was waiting for the other challenge of the grandfather keeping up with the young grandson!!.

Great piece.

Gordon

Peta said...

Hi Heather, this was great and such a surprise. I felt a real sense of Andrew's dilemmas about his health/illness, his outlook optimism/pessimism, his success yet failure, etc. It was lovely that the boy had a genuine fondness for his grandpa suspiciously when he first arrived I thought it was a play to get in the good books for the inheritance - only becos Andrew had mentioned the family ina way that impied they would be squabbling over it all!

This piece had so much to offer. I think some further editing could tighten it up, make it a bit sharper but it is terrific.

Well done. Peta

sue moffitt said...

What a beautiful story. So poignant and vulnerable. I completely got Andrew, with his internal dialogue, his assets and his dilema, especially with the boat. I don't think it's hard to imagine Ben inheriting a beautiful boat. Isnt life weird, fancy a cardboard box providing more fun that his many toys? I thought he still lived at the old house but I'm not sure - I would like to know. Its a great read Heather, well done.

Scriveners said...

Kerry says:
Very poignant, Heather. Beautifully told as well. I love the little touches like Andrew rubbing the stubble on his chin with his walking stick. It's these touches which bring your stories to life.