I'm not sure if my brain was sharper this week or if your editing simplified things a little -- but it did seem somewhat easier to follow.
I spent a bit of time mulling over your conclusion, and, whilst I appreciated the simplicity, also felt I would have liked a little more spice in it - of the "why?" or "WIIFM" flabour - a reminder about context. I do appreciate that I am not your intended reader.
BTW - who IS your intended reader?
I'm amazed by the work, Gordon. Do you find the commitment to blog it adds anything to the project?
Kerry says: I can see your commitment to getting this done is really making a difference. You're on a roll. I understand the introductory paragraph was new this week. I just had the feeling that you had a different, less-informed reader in mind there which doesn't quite fit with the reader who would be dealing with the complexities of the remainder of the chapter.
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Hi Gordon.
I'm not sure if my brain was sharper this week or if your editing simplified things a little -- but it did seem somewhat easier to follow.
I spent a bit of time mulling over your conclusion, and, whilst I appreciated the simplicity, also felt I would have liked a little more spice in it - of the "why?" or "WIIFM" flabour - a reminder about context. I do appreciate that I am not your intended reader.
BTW - who IS your intended reader?
I'm amazed by the work, Gordon.
Do you find the commitment to blog it adds anything to the project?
Kerry says:
I can see your commitment to getting this done is really making a difference. You're on a roll.
I understand the introductory paragraph was new this week. I just had the feeling that you had a different, less-informed reader in mind there which doesn't quite fit with the reader who would be dealing with the complexities of the remainder of the chapter.
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