Kerry says: Is this new writing? Well done. It's clear and relatively easy to follow. There are a couple of places where I would change the sentence structure, eg 'particularly is the case...' is awkward. Maybe 'This is particularly so for the case....'
It must be the jet lag but I wasn't able to pick up the thread and follow it through. - That's just me sharing, not making a comment on your writing.
If I WERE to make a constructive comment, it would be to suggest applying an old rule of technical writing: alternate long with short sentences. There's something in the brain which appreciates the variety and the rhythm.
Gordon, I think it's fantastic that you're being so prolific and getting so much of this project done!
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Kerry says:
Is this new writing? Well done. It's clear and relatively easy to follow.
There are a couple of places where I would change the sentence structure, eg 'particularly is the case...' is awkward. Maybe 'This is particularly so for the case....'
I can only add again, well done Gordon.
It must be the jet lag but I wasn't able to pick up the thread and follow it through. - That's just me sharing, not making a comment on your writing.
If I WERE to make a constructive comment, it would be to suggest applying an old rule of technical writing: alternate long with short sentences. There's something in the brain which appreciates the variety and the rhythm.
Gordon, I think it's fantastic that you're being so prolific and getting so much of this project done!
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